Overall, this is an excellent start to a compelling essay. Keep in mind that although the committee allows you to write up to five pages, three double-spaced pages is usually adequate. Feel free to add more detail, but make sure your text is concise and transparent. You might consider "writing" ideas and then "rewriting" them. Too often, authors put ideas onto the page, but do not render those ideas compellingly. Giving your sentences a bit of extra effort, and giving your experiences a bit of extra reflection, will result in a persuasive essay that compliments your accomplishments and character.
Many doctoral students in anthropology may not have access to models
of what a fundable dissertation proposal looks like. This page provides
examples of successful proposals, with an emphasis on grants for dissertation
The impetus for making these proposal available was my seminar in research
design. But I'd like the list to grow and to become a resource for students
in anthropology everywhere. If you or your students are willing to share
funded proposals -- to NSF, Wenner-Gren, SSRC, Fulbright, or other agencies
-- please consider sending them
to me, and I will make them available here. Contributions from all subfields
of anthropology are welcome.
NSF Dissertation Improvement Grants Cultural Anthropology Program